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Jul 04

You ask me why suddenly
The sun started shining in my life
Why the ocean never seemed so bright
Why smile appears on my face

Why the flowers lose all the beauty
When you stand right next to them
Why the hours of my day
Just dissapear in a short second,
When i'm with you

You ask me
Why i feel the way i do
Why my happiness turns into a tear
When you turn your back on me

Why do i stop living
From the moment you say goodbye
And suddenly the world stabbs life into my heart
The moment you set on me your eyes

You ask me, like some dispair
You make me wanna change the world
And end up all your insecurities
Just to be worthy of your smile

Why i lie
Pretending i'm alright
When you call
From a distant place

Why i smile, understanding
When you talk about the world
Being jealous of the oxygen
'cos you breathe it with your life

How i wish i could just tell you
All the reasons why i cry
All the moments i exist
Why it is you are my life

publicado por JayneMars às 13:41

3 comentários:
JoJo, adoweiii...escreves mm bueeeeeeee bem!! =) Um dia vais ser uma escritora mt famosa... ;) Nunca desistas... ;)
*kiss*
Just^a^girl a 10 de Julho de 2004 às 13:04

Thanx 4 your comments old man!...be sure to remind me of sharing my fortune with you big brother, when i become a super famous writer..or not.I'll see you in tokyo soon!Kiss Kiss

JM
Jayne Mars a 9 de Julho de 2004 às 14:20

well.. how shall i start... don't want to be so obgnoscious to criticize or to state you're the best writter ever since... but, believe you're in a good way.. one's got to know about it's personal aims doing anything.. in your particular case, you should read it as if it was the fisrt time and try to understand if the right message has passed through.. if you believe so, then you accomplished your goals.. if, au contraire, you couldn't quite reach the reader's emotions (of any kind), then you should look further into your writtings.. even though i wasn't quite moved (prbbly generation gap???), can recognize some feelings of my youth.. which is very nice! so i leave you with my comments, looking forward to meet you again in Tokyo, as last time. cheers mate!
easy wiskey a 9 de Julho de 2004 às 14:14

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